Below are some examples of things you should avoid when writing about Gettin’ Square:
There is always that women in the cow patterned bikini and he says she is wearing too much.
This was written as evidence of the fact that Dabba is a gangster, but it doesn’t tell me why such behaviour (if it were true) would be proof of him being a gangster. What is lacking is an explanation of the fact that this kind of comment is typical of a gangster mentality that sees women primarily as objects of desire. This would have been a nice segway into another excellent example mentioned in this piece of the scene when Dabba goes to a bikini car wash.
Dialogue expresses this character as it brings forth his level of communication skills. Dabba uses foul language when speaking in front of his two baby daughters.
This tells us nothing about why this kind of behaviour is an indication of Dabba being a gangster at heart. Mentioning the fact that this shows perhaps a limited vocabulary born out of a poor education (commonly associated with criminality) would have shown the reader that you understand why the writer decided to have Dabba swear in front of his daughters. Similarly, discussing the fact that he may be unaware of the inappropriate nature of his language because he does it so often and how that says something about the company he keeps (a long time in prison, gangster friends like Crusher, etc) would have further shown an understanding of the choices made by the screenwriter.
Look at the next example and write a paragraph explaining why it is not thorough enough, in terms of analysis.
…when Chika goes into his restaurant and offers him an offer, he declines saying that he can’t come into his area and boss him around. This also shows he is a criminal deep down.
Clearly, this is a good piece of evidence from the text that illustrates Dabba is best described as a ganster, but it fails to explain how this situation shows this. It needs to be said that Chika is one of the most feared gansters in Brisbane and that we see no other character in the film stand up to him in any. This fact makes the cool, calm manner in which Dabba stands his ground a perfect illustration of the power he holds in the underworld. Chika’s capitulation is proof that he too acknowledges Dabba’s status as gangster to be feared and respected.