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017 – Writing a Speech, deciding on your topic
on Month: March 2013
on 016 – Queensland in Gettin’ square & holiday homework
on Today, I am going to give you a practice outcome to do; I need it back by Thursday, so I can mark it over the holidays and have feedback for you first week back.
You need to write apprx. 1/2 – 3/4 of a page.
The first few lines of your response should tell me what the representation of Dabba is, and the rest of what you write should explain how particular codes are used to created that representation.
Now, let’s look at Gettin’ Square; I’d like to focus on the way Queensland is represented by looking at the scene where Dabba and Crusher are walking along the beach front.
In terms of Queensland, there are 2 primary representations, that are created through clever use of location:
1. Flashy, Glizty, Tacky
Afresco (outside) dinning
Mansions
Luxury boats/ marinas
2. Shady Underworld
Prisons
Alleyways
Carparks
Spits dingy apartment
Night time locations
Petrol Stations
These two contrasting representations of Queensland highlight the clash between the criminal and the law sides of society. The struggles of Barry, Dabba and Spit, as they attempt to get square, is reflected in these contrasting representations of Queensland.
Holiday Homework
- Script draft completed
- Prep for next outcome by creating revision sheet
016 – Issues Oral form, rules and past SAC comments
on Prompt for alternate task students:
The powerless can never do anything to prevent conflict from happening
Timing for Oral Presentation:
- 2 minutes, 30 seconds – knock on desk
- 3 minutes – timekeeper says “time”
- 3 minutes, 30 minutes – presenter is stopped
- Marks lost for being under or over time
If a student refuses or is not prepared to present when called…
- Students receive a second chance to present but lose a whole grade (i.e. C+ = D+)
- If the student presents during the next lesson (i.e. at the second opportunity), their maximum grade can only be a B
- The articles MUST be submitted with the pro-forma – this is essential for students to receive an S!
One the day – Presentation Procedure
- All students should be ready to begin presenting from the second English lesson in the first week of term – immediately after the holidays!
- A completed proforma with articles should be ready to hand in before delivering speech
- Call for volunteers – allow the volunteers to go first (however, they do not receive any extra grades for volunteering).
- Once all volunteers have presented (or if no one volunteers), begin to pull names out of a hat (or other random selection process). Names should only be pulled out for that lesson – students should be ready for each English lesson that they attend in case that is the day.
It helps to see what I have said to students in the past about their issues oral. Have a look at past SAC comments to find out what good students did well and what weak students missed out.
Holiday homework
- Have oral written and memorised, and have all supporting documentation ready to present
- Read plot summaries and character information on Macbeth. You DO NOT need to read the play. Good plot summaries and character analysis can be found on this blog for those that are interested (click here).
015 – SOE, Prompt & Rebuttal
on Pigs and pollution: China can’t keep ignoring the environment
on In a joke currently circulating on China’s most popular social media, Sina Weibo, a Beijing resident boasts about his happy life in the badly air-polluted capital, saying that every morning when he opens the window he can enjoy a free smoke.
A Shanghai resident sniffed:“Bah! Every time we turn on the tap, we get free pork soup.”
Hilarious, but grim. Deadly air is shrouding most big Chinese cities and thousands of dead pigs have been found in the Huangpu River: things are bad enough that China’s normally compliant Parliament has begun to protest.
By last week, more than 6,000 rotting pig carcasses had been cleaned up from Huangpu River, which supplies tap water to Shanghai. These dead pigs were mostly dumped by nearby pig breeders in Zhejiang province. They don’t have the capacity to do biosafety disposal of sick animals, nor can they get compensation from the government for such losses from disease due to a lack of insurance and compensation mechanisms in the industry. Traces of some common pig viruses have been found in some of the animals floating in the river.
Experts from the central government claimed the issue had been appropriately solved, ruling out the possibility of major threat to public health. They further clarified no sick animals had been butchered and sold for meat in this case. However,one would expect the rumours to continue because many similar cases have been reported in the past several years.
The tip of the iceberg
The dead pigs of Shanghai are just a piece of the jigsaw puzzle. In recent years increasing numbers of “cancer villages” in China have been revealed, mainly on social media sites and blogs where activists and environmental experts raise public awareness of soil and groundwater contamination. In these polluted areas, soaring rates of diseases like stomach cancer are believed to be caused by drinking contaminated water containing hazardous chemicals disposed of by local industries.
In February, Deng Fei, a former investigative journalist and now an influential activist, initiated a campaign, inviting Chinese “netizens” to take photos of polluted rivers in their hometowns and upload them to Weibo. Meanwhile, in coalition with journalists and environmental activists, he launched a “China Water Crisis Independent Investigation” which regularly releases information on Weibo about water quality nationwide. His call received thousands of responses from net users, and for the first time provoked a national debate on groundwater safety.
Based on an insider source, Deng further revealed on Weibo the truth about a recent water dispute that arose in Weifang prefecture, Shandong province. Some local companies are believed to have discharged underground pollution for years, severely contaminating ground water and giving the area one of the highest rates of stomach cancer in the world. However, during the investigation the local government tried to cover up and even block media coverage.
Outrage over pollution has widely spread among ordinary Chinese people, and even attracted attention on social media channels throughout the world.
Some Chinese media have also joined the crusade against water pollution. Event People’s Daily, the Party’s mouthpiece outlet, has stepped in and issued a series of appeals on its Weibo account. They warn “enterprises shouldn’t poison the public to chase higher profits; government agencies shouldn’t loosen their regulations for the sake of their work performance”, “we want a GDP that won’t kill the next generation, and from the government to the public, we should all trumpet the cause of water pollution control and preserve clean water sources for a beautiful China”.
According to the China Geological Survey, 90% of underground water has suffered different degrees of contamination, with more than 60% suffering severe contamination. Also according to statistics released by Xinhua News Agency, in 118 Chinese cities only 3% of the underground water is considered moderately clean.
A no-win situation
Furious public opinion has made it hard for the authorities to ignore these crises. During the annual National People’s Congress and China People’s Political Consultative Conference which has just ended, the questions around water quality as well as other environmental issues in China were frequently raised on the urgent agenda. The new elected government has pledged to tackle the growing health crisis provoked by environmental degradation.
There are appeals to speed up environmental legislation to improve environment quality and push for a strict time-line for solving environmental problems. The new leadership has effectively announced several new laws and standards on environmental protection over the last two months, including a detailed implementation framework from the Ministry of Environmental Protection. It seems the new leaders have been gradually living up to their promise to establish an effective service-oriented government which draws a clear line between itself and the old.
Keeping the balance between economic growth and environmental protection is a critical challenge for the new government. China is still on a course of seeking maximum economic growth. Unless the whole nation gets down to pursuing a sustainable development, there will never be a win-win situation in the relationship between human and nature.
The authors do not work for, consult to, own shares in or receive funding from any company or organisation that would benefit from this article. They also have no relevant affiliations.
This article was originally published at The Conversation.
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015 – Gettin’ Square narrative and production elements
on Today, we are going to look at:
- The representations of Spit, Barry and Dabba
- The representation of Queensland
- The way in which editing is used to construct the time line
- Important scenes
When does the film begin and how do we know this?
Is the opening of the film easy to understand? Explain your answer.
014 – Persuasive Techniques
on Today we are going to have a look at some persuasive techniques. There are quite a few on the sheet I have given you; we will look at a few examples. Then, I would like you to have a go at write some persuasive statements using different persuasive techniques each time.
Below are a list of things I would like you to persuade me of:
- Homework is a waste of time
- Time travel is possible
- Left handed people and better than right handed people
- Paper clips make excellent jewellery
- ‘Love’ should be taught as a compulsory subject at school
I would also like to take in the introduction and main body paragraph you wrote last class; I will take them home and give you feedback on Monday.
COMMA RULES
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Rule #1: Use a comma to separate independent clauses linked with coordinating conjunctions.
If you have what can be two separate sentences but want to make them one (creating a compound sentence), use a comma and a coordinating conjunction (for, and, nor, but, or, yet, so) to link them.
My English Instructor was a good teacher, and he taught me a lot about the writing process.
Rule #2: Use a comma at the end of an introductory element.
An introductory element begins a sentence by providing a transition from the last sentence or background information before the independent clause.
In a hard fought contest, the home team prevailed after two overtimes.
Rule #3: Use a comma to set off nonessential elements.
A nonessential element is a word, phrase, or clause that can be removed and the sentence still makes sense and is grammatically correct.
I went to the movies with my neighbours, Ron and Sally, and then we went to dinner.
Rule #4: Use a comma to separate items in a list or a series.
Anytime there is a list of three or more items, use a comma to separate them.
In my American literature class we read The Great Gatsby, All the King’s Men, As I Lay Dying, and the Grapes of Wrath.
Rule #5: Use a comma to separate multiple adjectives.
If more than one adjective is used in a sentence, separate them with commas.
Her shiny, red, expensive, sports car is envied by the neighbours.
Rule #6: Use a comma to introduce a quotation.
He said to me, “I appreciate your willingness to participate in the classroom discussions.”
Rule #7: Use a comma with addresses and dates.
When using addresses in a sentence, whether specific or not, a comma should be placed between the street and city, between the city and the state, and at the end of the address.
Aims Community College is located in Greeley, Colorado.
When using a specific date in a sentence, a comma should be placed between the day and the year and also after the year.
August 22, 2011, is the day I began my first semester of college.
013 – Review question on Conflict Resolution, look at persuasive forms & Data Sheet for Outcome
on Thinking about a conflict you have experienced: did you feel the solution was just and right? Was the solution imposed on you or did you reach it yourself?
In groups of four I want you to feedback you answers to your class mates. I will visit each group and find out what you have discussed.
I have been informed that you are allowed to bring in one half page data sheet into the persuasive outcome next week. This data sheet must be:
- Written in bullet point form (no complete sentences)
- Sighted and signed by me (DEN) the day before the outcome
You may wish to include the following in your data sheet:
- Important dates, names and places
- Key points on the structure of your chosen form
- Persuasive techniques that you plan to use
Now we are going to work through a fantastic PowerPoint about Persuasive Writing in relation to TRM, which was created by Ms. Volich.
012 – TEDx Video, Resolving Conflicts, Outcome Grades
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- What type of conflicts are the most difficult to resolve?
- Do you think there are some conflicts that can never be resolved?
In most conflicts, resolutions are about compromise and it can sometimes be difficult to reach an agreement or solution that all parties are satisfied with. Often the involvement of a third party is required to assist with a resolution. For examples the United Nations is often involved in negotations between countries.
Working in small groups, discuss the solutions found to the conflicts you have experienced. Did you feel the solution wa just and right? Was the solution imposed on you or did you reach it yourself?